Floppy's book criticism

My sister is writing a book. Here's my "constructive" criticism for it:
1. She didn't change our last name- she's trying to make it sound all ordinary but not many ppl have the same last name as us.
2. It sort of sounds like an adult's writing it-which isn't bad-except for the fact that it doesnt sound like its coming from the heart of the child.
3. So far it seems like there's not gonna be much suspense, thrill, action, or real problem. It just sounds like every other extremely boring kids' book with stuff like "I have a problem-this bully at school takes my lunch money"-or friends fighting or a bad teacher- or for the slutty overgrown middle schooler books- "I don't have a boyfriend or I can't find the right makeup." So yeah I really don't see how there's going to be a real conflict.
4. There's not much creativity infused in it, especially since it seems to be solely based on the author's life. Now I will read a memoir if you make it interesting. But it's really not interesting.

As far as the pros, it was fairly well written for someone of her age.
-to Floppy, you must not get upset at me for saying this. If you're really going to try to publish it, you have to be able to take criticism-potential publishers will probably be a lot tougher then me.

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